Hey! your track completely bangs, it's really, really good, that part at 01:09 is super super good, I think you did a fantastic job with it.
Mixing wise you're in there man, I don't see anything to complain (I'm not a technical guy in this regard so this type of feedback is better left for other judges).
Compositionally I have something against songs that have a lot of buildup, it's not that it's bad in itself, it's just that if there's so much buildup for something, it has to pay off, because you're hyping the audience so much for something, and if the landing isn't struck then it's a big "eh", that said, 01:09 you managed it pretty well but on 02:42, I don't feel like it quite lands right, it's very empty and shallow, it also ends very abruptly.
Like I said before, too many buildups ruin something for me, the structure of this being intro-verse-buildup-chorus1-breakdown(Which I'd love to see expanded)-buildup-chorus2, it's like the story you're trying to tell with the song gets interrupted mid way to hype up the next chorus, think like a rollercoaster ride that hits the first high so well only to slow down completely and rise you up again to another, smaller slope, it's just not gonna hit the same as if the big slope was at the end, I don't know if this analogy works but that's what I kind of imagine it as.